Draft Revision Ideas

I haven’t even touched on any vivid details in my paper. I need to add some personal stories - Give both Jones and myself creditability. This will go along well with the voice I will use. It will probably be best to use a reflective-admiring voice. This gives the readers a concept of Jones being larger than life. The paper needs specifics events. This could go along with the personal story, but should be tailored to the paragraphs claim. FUN STUFF.